This Picture of You ( A Shape Poem)

It’s unexpected, this picture of you. Your back – wider than I remembered,

all      straight      lines                                                                       

like a  cardboard  box

from  shoulder to  hip

next to the unfinished

one    of     our     son.

            n

           u                               d

        o                                                    e

Four shoulders r                                                                     d to a task,

                 Sharp

                  triangles

                  of bone, raising

                      pallid    Dutch     skin.

It’s a frame by frame picture

silent but for the tck, tck, tck, in my head

minute reels p……u……l……l……i…….n……g to the next scene.

.

My

        h

                  e

                              a

                                        d

tilts to watch yours, level with his as you rise.

                                                                           He reaches his length before you.

                                                                           T

                                                                                 u

                                                                                       r

                                                                                            n

                                                                                        i

                                                                                   n

                                                                               g

                                                                        his head bent,

                                                                                                            s.

                                                                                                                e

                                                                                                        s

                                                                                                i

I see my own lips curl upward in his face, and a hand r

A stop signal.

Acknowledgement.

                                           i            p            e

A minute                    r             p             l                   

under your skin telegraphs awareness across your back,

his face over your shoulder, blue eyes holding my stare.

Gravel crunches under size 13 shoes, car door slams, seat hurls backwards.

Adjustment.

It’s unexpected, this picture of you.

Your back,

rigid,

e

r

e

c

t

leads you away from my sight.

*****

For information on ‘shape’ or ‘concrete’ poetry please visit the link below.

Concrete or Shape poetry.

I Shared this at dVerse Poets Pub

FormForAll – Etherees, Shape & Concrete Poems

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35 thoughts on “This Picture of You ( A Shape Poem)”

  1. These shape verses are never easy to implement but you have done a fine job with this offering, you know with anything that is visually challenging like this poem clearly is, it also adds a certain visualisation to the reader that not only gives one the enjoyment in the flow of poetry but it also enables the reader to absorb the artistry.

    Thank you for adding this one my friend, it is a joy to read…

    Androgoth

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    1. What lovely words. This poem was a personal moment – a clarity that struck, if you like, and the shapes formed at the moment the words appeared. I am very happy to hear that it stuck a chord with you. 🙂

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  2. I had to read this over and over. You create suspense and tension with this and the shapes accented the text and moved beyond it. How well your text and shape work together! WELL DONE. Thank you very much for participating with us today. I enjoyed this a great deal!

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  3. This is such a lovely poem. You use the shaping very well to slow down the pacing to make the reader’s eye scan the scene. It’s really really well done, and a lovely moment.

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  4. This is really cool and a very good job. This form is more the concrete/projective verse type that I’m used to and love the way your piece adapted to the form, and how the form enhanced the piece:)

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  5. Jo,
    It suddenly dawned on me that concrete or shape poetry can be most versatile. It takes us on a twisting round about journey but we are still there. Brilliant form and verse!

    Hank

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